Monday, 11 April 2011

We earn our tickets on the Poetry Bus this week by using Danabug's
prompt as the first line/phrase of a poem . . . 


Domestic Math


I am a crooked line. No doubt there is
a complex function linking me to you
that perfectly reflects my crookedness.
And that's always the trouble, isn't it?
Math leaves no room for any imperfection.
So. Given 'X' we will always find 'Y' 
defined with such precision as we choose.
I am your complex, silly, crooked X.
and all my defeX you've evaluated
so you'll come out just perfect - that's math's way.
I daren't complain 'Y won't you wash the dishes?
Y leave your dirty washing on the floor?
Y do you often fart and always snore?
Y must you shout an swear and slam the door?
Your so. So Y! I can't stand you any more.'

15 comments:

  1. oh my...us guys can be such a pain eh? hehe like your fun word play on the crooked line...

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  2. The defeX line is very clever. Don't really understand the 'Your so' but then I'm not too bright.
    Its a good job we can't define our relationships algabraically.

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  3. Peter G. Thank you for the comment. I couldn't figure the best way to express the sentiment in that line typographically. And of course, it's the wrong "You're" (Peter Goulding leads 30-Love!)
    Let's try
    "You're so . . . So Y!

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  4. I guess he has lost his 'X' factor, very entertaining take on the prompt Lucy!

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  5. Which only goes to prove how far apart X and Y really are, despite being neighbours in the alphabet. :)

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  6. That pesky math principle ~ it's a great way to put a relationship into perspective. I totally got the 'Your so.' Quite the declaration.

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  7. Oh yes, what we put up with because we're with our "perfect" match. On the other hand, who else would put up with us?

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  8. This is brilliant.
    well done.

    :)

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  9. I enjoyed your clever mathmatical Xplanation of love gone awry. "DefeX" is brilliant!

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  10. X-actly. Men have a Y and that's the question, but girls have the double X, and that's the big multiplier!!

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  11. Stafford - that's a thought I never thought of! The algebra of chromosomes! Why didn't you leave your comment before I wrote the poem. I don't know - Men!!

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  12. How about titling your excellent poem "Y is a dysfunction of X"

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  13. Very apt, Doctor! But I wonder how many non-mathematical readers would appreciate the pun?

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  14. beautiful write…

    Invite you to join poets rally week 42 by sharing a free verse today.

    You will love the encouragements you get once you are in and make commitment.

    Your poetry rocks!

    awards for you!

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